I was in the midst of conjuring a clever reply when Jess came knocking gently on the door.
In a tone musical but uncertain, "Are you two decent? " If she hadn't asked so sarcastically, I probably could have glowered a bit less.
Beating me to reply, Jet chirped, "Sadly, yes."
Jess slowly poked open the doorway, as if half-expecting to need to slam it back shut, and cooed, "I hear only talking."
Why did she find it necessarily to humiliate me? Acidly, I quipped, "Come in Jess."
I didn't really mind the interruption. Jess was always good at giving us space. Whatever it was, it was probably semi-important. Semi. I guess I was somewhat anxious to find out what she wanted, but really more anxious to get back to door-closed time with Jet.
She stepped in delicately, with a huge, innocent smile. "Hi again, Jet."
Patience wasn't exactly a virtue I had yet cultivated in my eighteen years.
Thankfully, she obliged. "Anyways, some guy came by looking for you."
Who? I instead asked, "When?"
"Like two minutes ago. Told him you weren't here." She waited.
Jet grinned and teased, "Uh oh."
I now noticed the envelope in Jess' hand. For me? Well, yeah, probably. Obviously. But, I wasn't expecting anyone. I didn't really have any other friends here at school. Certainly, nobody who would just show up.
I started, "Um", but Jess cut me off.
"Allie, you are SO red right now, " she managed between laughs. Jet kissed my cheek as Jess continued, noticing my noticing of the letter, "Yeah, he left this."
I thumbed the letter absentmindedly while Jet purred, "A rival's love letter?" I gave him a look, of either love or anger, I'm not really sure, but didn't dignify that to respond.
"God, Allie, just open it."
I retrieved a single folded sheet and as I unwrapped it, I spacedly asked her, "Did he say anything else?"
"Just that last night was the best night of his life and that he can't wait to see you again."
If you thought I was red before...
Jet smiled ear to ear, turning to Jess, "Really? Was he attractive?"
Jess continued on deadpan, "Oh very. A little short and young for my taste, but for Allie, just perfect."
My gaze flickered between their two very amused faces before settling back upon the note in my hands. I could listen to their teasing, or I could read this stupid letter.
Forgive my intrusion into your personal life, but I'm quite curious as to the cause of my sister's interest in you. I'm confident you will understand to whom I'm referring. Regardless of how you think she feels, she's extremely dangerous, and if you see her, please contact the number listed below. Donovan Cross.
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Perry's was good, thx broski
im copying your unit frames
PLOT THICKENS
Holy crap i did not see that one coming.
Keep it coming raddy :)
very interesting. I think I trust mania more than donovan by far though.
Keep them plot points rolling out.
ilu rad
Raddy, how do you write stories like this? Have you already scripted everything out, including the ending, and are filling it in with detailed imagery? Or do you take it in little chunks and decide what would be an interesting twist?
Seems like more of a catching-up point for the downs kids than a real plot twist. We already found out the two were related in the chapter where Donovan kills the father, and again when he confronts her in the chapter where we meet Allie.
And for the record, I predicted this back in the chapter with the video of Crow and Mania.
HAIL FROM HAMSTERDAM
@s2l, anon: I have all the major points mapped out, but I don't necessarily know exactly "how" I get form point A to point B sometimes.
@above: Fair point. However, it's important to recognize exactly who knows what in the story. Because there's some backstory to this first person narrative, the reader is sometimes better informed than the protagonist. (Or perhaps the reader is smarter at putting clues together than the protagonist)
Writing this has really shown me the occasional challenge of doing a story like this in first person. I can't really tell you "Donovan has been searching for the girl who fascinated his sister at the concert hall," and so it necessitates bringing the events going on outside of Allie's vision back to her with "proof" that things are happening.
And typing anything longer than this on an iphone is impossible
So it is a catching-up point for the downs kids, such as Allie. Gotcha.
WHERE IS BOOTLEG
WHERE IS BOOTLEG
WHERE IS BOOTLEG
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@lion, I think Raddy started the story near the end and Bootleg is Alex in the future. They already have enough past history established that he could have known her back when she was called Bia, and maybe even before that, when she was Charisma. I don't think she started calling herself Mania until after the thing with Crow; you will notice that no one explicitly says her name in that piece.
oh, i didn't catch that part. sorry x_x
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